Don’t Pea the Bed

John re-read the note, wondering if he’d overstepped.

Thanks for the hospitality.

I had a hard time sleeping, so I did some investigating. Lo and behold! I found a dried chickpea under my mattress.

I can’t believe you tested me!

Penelope

P.S. Calling yourself a real “Prince” is creepy.

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Category: Fiction, fiction|poetry, flash fiction, Micro, YeahWrite Tags: fairy tales, microprose challenge, the princess and the pea, twisted tales, yw#356

5 Comments on “Don’t Pea the Bed”

Shailaja V
February 8, 2018, 10:52 am

Brilliant and yet so subtle. You’re a wizard at this!
Christine
February 8, 2018, 1:16 pm

Good for Penelope for standing up for herself. John’s a creep, for sure.
Srivalli's Kitchen (Srivalli Rekha)
February 8, 2018, 4:08 pm

Atta girl, Penelope. 🙂
Laura
February 9, 2018, 6:54 am

The formatting actually made me miss the first line initially, and I enjoyed the note as a complete story! But the first line (when I finally saw it) did make me laugh – of course he’d be clueless.
Gypsy Thornton (@inkgypsy)
February 9, 2018, 10:24 am

This is great! Unexpected and wonderful. A retelling, commentary and great humor all in one.